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Entry for :iconturtiedroppings:'scontest ^^ ...or not? xD I forgot that I to show the second character and I tried to make a scene that was seen directly with another character's eyes...but the attempt didn't go well because there's nothing that makes understand that there's a second character. As suggested, I should have added a leg, or an hand ^^; Well... the next time I'll remember this :D 
I sadly have no time to correct it due to...looot of work to finish (guess why? yes! thesis) =A=

It doesn't matter! :) If the absence of a character doesn't allow my entry to be accepted...well, I had a very good time drawing her, as always! ^U^ I hope you like it the same! :heart:
Good luck to all the contestants! ;D

...I go back working on my thesis... I need to fix several things! Wish me good luck =A=

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:star::star::star::star::star-half: Overall
:star::star::star::star::star: Vision
:star::star::star::star::star-half: Originality
:star::star::star::star::star-half: Technique
:star::star::star::star::star-empty: Impact

Whoa! ...okay... it's obviously been a super long time since I did a critique... now they show the pictures above in its own separate box?? AWESOME <3

NOW TO THE ACTUAL CRITIQUE:
Let me first say; I adore this picture. Celeste is such a great character to play around with, and you took the grace, and made an even more lovable version of it. <33 I also really love the background, and scene effects such as the glare, and light hitting the water, and the sand splashing out from behind her heel (as it should!)

VISION: 5/5! I think your idea was very well thought out, playful, and a perspective you don't see too often in "character interaction" scenes. Very well done. I think this turned out very nicely.

ORIGINALITY: 4.5/5 ---As I said above, this has a certain uniqueness about the fact that it a rarer sight for character interactions. But, that is not to say that this kind of scene doesn't exists at all... so.. I just can't claim full 'original idea' for that reason. That reason aside, I'd give it top marks! Very well made scene, good use of clothing design (using some of Celeste's original features, and adding your own twist suitable for a beach!), and good effort with the overall amount of little-but-needed details. <3

TECHNIQUE: 4.5/5 -

The Positive: Details are gorgeous. I love the way you drew the water. Very realistic... you can see the natural way that the water lightens as it gets closer to the shore, the depth further out.. and the numerous -tedious- specks of light that speckle the water's horizon. LOVE IT! The sand has a nice gradient of color, and a fairly nice grasp of sand banks. I appreciate the fact that you did not just create these as flat plains, but as bumps... most of us know that beaches are almost never entirely flat. xD The way the clothing and hair moves is very well portrayed and accurate. It's great seeing it not just fly in 'any which direction', but having a clear sense of the character moving, and in *what* direction.

- The Negative: Not much to negatively say about this..but, here goes: The reason I took off a half mark for this section, is because there are certain features that could have been added that would have made this scene come to life even more! Adding an arm/hand or (had this scene been a bit bigger) even the tip of a shoe/foot of the other character as it hits the sand behind Celeste. This would have given the scene more dynamic! And help to *further* differentiate it from the general "beach camera pose", versus the effect you wanted of the viewer seeing as if through the unseen character's *own eyes*. Another (though this could be a thing of personal style, and less important) possible tip; adding a bit of grain to the sand closer to the characters! Helps it to "pop" a little more when you add the odd 'grainy' feel to it, but...if it's a matter of personal art style...you carry on sir~ <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/h/h…" width="15" height="13" alt=":heart:" data-embed-type="emoticon" data-embed-id="357" title="Heart"/>

IMPACT: 4/5 It crushes me to not give you full marks. But that would not be honest, and that would not make this a critique you could learn from. x'D So.

- The Positive: Shadows, details, and lighting sources were very well formed. Attention to detail, very well done, again. The scene you tried to portray -for the most part- turned out very nicely! I can definitively tell that it is another character's perspective, versus a 'camera' photo based on the angle, lighting and soft shaded-feel to the picture. Like a scene in a film! Celeste is also drawn very well, and you caught her personality in this picture perfectly!!

- The Negative: As mentioned above... I think the impact of what you wanted to portray with this picture was affected by lack of a show of 'presence' of the character behind her. This could have been countered by simply adding a bit more character depth. The end result here was overall very well made, but that extra limb/detail might have helped you to bring this picture into a more complete piece of what you had in mind.

Nonetheless. ALL IN ALL, I ADORE IT. Awesome Job Martino!! And I wish you the best of luck in the contest. <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/h/h…" width="38" height="15" alt=":hug:" data-embed-type="emoticon" data-embed-id="160" title="Hug"/>